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A Friday the 13th Horror Short Story: Crow Girl by Alicia Dean ~ #Horror #Fri13thStories #Blog

The eleventh of thirteen creepy tales of murder and mayhem on Friday the 13th…

Crow Girl by Alicia Dean

Fun Fact:  

I am obsessed with Mr. Ballen. If you aren’t familiar with him, you should definitely check out his YouTube channel and podcasts. He tells all sorts of fascinating, often crazy and creepy tales. And he’s a fabulous story teller. He’s also not bad-looking and is a former navy seal, so there is that… 🙂

Many of his stories have given me plot ideas but I hadn’t actually written books from any of those ideas…until now. I got the idea for Crow Girl from an incredible story about a young girl who was befriended by crows (see the video below). Now, of course, in my book, things don’t turn out as heartwarming as they did in the true story.

Muwahahahaha…

Find Alicia’s Friday the 13th story here…

https://books2read.com/CrowGirl

Blurb:

Ten-year-old Twyla Gillette was abandoned by her mother and placed in an abusive foster home. Teased unmercifully by her classmates, she has no friends—other than the crows. As a toddler, she shared her food with the birds and they befriended her, bringing her gifts and always looking out for her, protecting her.

When the teasing turns to vicious bullying, and her foster family’s abuse becomes more relentless, Twyla relies on the crows to make things right.

It’s not that she wants her friends to hurt anyone…but sometimes wicked people have to learn a lesson.

Excerpt:

When Mr. Lambert got home that night, Twyla was in big trouble. Everybody was talking about Braden being missing, so they were occupied with that and, instead of a spanking, she just got yelled at. The worst thing, though…they took her Raggedy Ann doll away from her. They told her she would get it back when she learned how to behave. She did her best to hold back her tears but couldn’t. She cried and begged, but they didn’t give in. Ms. Lambert snatched the doll from her bed and stalked down the hallway, disappearing into her room with Twyla’s prized possession. How would she sleep at night without her doll to cuddle?

After Twyla finished washing the supper dishes, she went out into the back yard. It was dusk but still fairly light outside. She looked up in the sky for the birds, but they were nowhere around. No doll…no birds. She was feeling very alone. And, other than at school, it would probably be a while before she could see Hester, with the Lamberts being so angry with her. When she got close to the bird bath, she noticed something new lying in the center of it. She frowned, trying to figure out what it was. She drew closer and saw that it was a round whiteish object with red stringy things hanging off of it. Putting her face closer to it, but not wanting to touch it, she got a really good look. She slapped her hand over her mouth to stifle a scream. The thing lying in the center of the birdbath, looking up toward the sky, was an eyeball.

About the Author:

At age 10, Alicia Dean wrote her first ever romance (featuring a hero who looked just like Elvis Presley and who shared the name of Elvis’ character in the movie, Tickle Me), and she still has the tattered, pencil-written copy. Alicia lives in Edmond, Oklahoma, where she enjoys reading, writing, MLB, NFL and watching (and rewatching) her favorite television shows like Dexter, Justified, and Breaking Bad. Some of her favorite authors are Michael Connelly, Dennis Lehane, Lee Child, Lisa Gardner, Ridley Pearson, Joseph Finder, and Jonathan Kellerman…to name a few.

Find Alicia Here:
https://linktr.ee/AliciaDean1835

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“Lessons From Rejection” by Olive Balla

Please help me welcome Olive Balla with an article all writers should read…

“Lessons From Rejection” by Olive Balla

For the umpteenth time, I click my cursor through the terse, to-the-point emailed responses to my latest barrage of agent queries. Thanks, but no thanks; Unfortunately, your work is not a good fit for our agency; and finally, the dreaded: This is in no way meant to reflect on the quality of your writing, keep it up.

“I’m seventy years old; the clock’s ticking,” my internal doomsday prophet intones. How many increments of a typical six-month waiting period do I have left? I don’t even buy green bananas.

Driven by the desire to hit that sweet spot required to find an agent willing to take a chance on my writing, I ask, “What does a good fit look like?”

Apparently, as the old saying goes, it’s different strokes for different folks. One agent’s pot-o-gold is another’s anathema. The bottom line is, how tough would an agent find it to sell my story? The shifts in the industry over the past decade alone have made it harder than ever to sell anything even remotely considered cliché, passé, overdone, or not edgy enough. To quote an agent who spoke at a writer’s convention I attended, “Please, don’t send me another story about vampires or kid wizards.” It’s a market-driven business; fads quickly come and go – emphasis on GO. To be marketable, a novel must not only be well-written, it must sizzle and pop with unique plot, peopled with and acted out by unique characters.

The latest series of rejections compelling me to action, I spend the day researching books on Amazon, paying careful attention to the back covers and blurbs to get a feel for what’s selling. Then I read my manuscript out loud, in hopes that getting another sense involved may help me spot gaps in the plot or highlight weak verbs and wonky sentences. Regardless of how many times I’ve edited, I edit again, searching for typos, misspellings, and over-use of be, am, is, are, was, were, been, or has been and have been.

If I’m still happy with my plot and character arcs, I seek and destroy anything written in passive voice – the use of which will doom even a great story.

I then move on to the Query letter. Does it sing? Does the Hook really hook? I re-read Query by C.J. Redwine and invest a day re-working my Query letter. I search the pages of the latest Guide to Literary Agents, highlighting the agencies I’ve not yet queried.

After doing everything I know to do, and as the melody of Cast Your Fate to the Wind – a golden oldie from the seventies – floats across my memory, I send out another barrage of Queries. Then I square my shoulders, open the Outline Template on my desktop, type in a working title, and begin another story.

 

Blurb: 
Eleven-year-old Jillie Ross escapes the vicious relatives threatening to flush away her beloved sister’s ashes if she doesn’t lead them to her dead father’s rumored treasure. Determined to find her sibling’s ashes and honor them along with their parents’ remains, the feisty orphan must endure harsh weather, escape a stalker, and hide from the police. But how long can she survive when at least one family member wants her dead?
Excerpt: 

Jillie dropped the metal lid as if it were red hot… Her stomach heaved, and something sour shot up her throat. Panic sent her running to the door where she pounded against the unyielding wood until the muscles in her arms cramped.  She  fell to her knees and clawed at the floor, ignoring the pain radiating up her arms from torn fingernails…The sound of approaching footsteps made the tiny hairs on the back of her neck move. Jillie snatched up the broken shovel handle and took a position in front of the door. With her legs slightly bent,, she balanced on the balls of her feet as she’d seen a martial arts professional do on television. She gripped the pole in both hands as if it were a sword, aimed its broken, pointed end at the door, and waited.

Olive Balla is a retired educator and author of two mystery/suspense novels An Arm and A Leg and Jillie published by TheWild Rose Press, Inc. A New Mexico native, Ms. Balla lives in the village of Los Lunas with her husband, her bossy puppy, and her pesky Internal Editor.
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